Mystery

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There is a guy I like.
I love the way he dances
and holds me tight.
Oh yeah yeah yeah!

Ha! There's a fella that just drives me crazy.
But you'll never know.
Cause it's a...

Mystery of age old.
It's a secret that won't be told.
In order to keep my personal
life for me. I'mma keep my
relationship on the low.

Hey! Take your cameras
away from me.
Can't you see I would like some privacy.
I just need to breathe please.

The paperazzi keep asking me.
"Hey! Girl who is your boyfriend!"
So I say it's a

Mystery of age old.
It's a secret that won't be told.
In order to keep my personal
life for me. I'mma keep my
relationship on the low.

I have a feeling one of these
days this mystery will be solved.
But for now the identity of my fella is

A mystery of age old
it's a secret that won't be told.
In order to keep my personal
life for me.
I'mma keep my relationship on the low.

Shhh! It's a mystery.




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To be honest, this sounded like something that a transexu...scratch that. It souded like something that Good Charlotte would write.

It was upbeat... but it never really expressed anything. I suppose it told a story of sorts....but not a particularly interesting one.

But yeah...upbeat. That's good at least.
The good parts of a book may be only something a writer is lucky enough to overhear or it may be the wreck of his whole damn life — and one is as good as the other.
Ernest Hemingway




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This sounded more like lyrics again which I'm pretty sure it was...if it was supposed to be a poem though, more poetic devises like metaphors or whatever would definitely had made this more interesting...and I'm not sure about lyrics, but I like lyrics that I can relate to me and this didn't do it for me, because of the paperazi (sp?) thing in it. But again, that's just me lol...as it is, this is still pretty good and has potential to be even better!




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i really liked this it was up beat and it was able to hold my attention for the whole time so yea i liked this a lot. :D
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erin
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Very pop-song like. I could easily hear Lindsay Lohan singing this. And no, that was not a compliment. Also, it's "paparazzi."
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All truly wise thoughts have been thought already thousands of times; but to make them truly ours, we must think them over again honestly, till they take root in our personal experience.
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