ether

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Ether I am.
Either that, or
Thither I go.
Fundamentally attributing
Everything I know
Of you and them
To what I see
In the moment.

[I am] A fool that is breaking through,
That has broken through
The stained-glass.
Into a world of defined
Movement, colour, and sound.
Motionless our mouthes
Signal one another
The sigil we discovered living inside us.

My fingers quills
Of dried blood [pining for life]
Trying to write you
What I feel, as a
Lingering curiosity fills
The air so very
Potently and
Sardonically white.

The scent [of lack of trust in the Heavens] attempting
To deny my love for you.
To mask everything
I've known as real.
A sleep so dangerous
I would never see the
Bright of day again. My
Eyes ever-locked like living seashells. [Death]

Cast down the worries,
Call away the fears.
I am everything to you,
And will be everlastingly.
You are to me the same and will evermore.
Endeavor to feel all that I am not saying.
Spire to know all that I can't say with these words.
This is the only affair that has ever mattered ever.

[The gods pulling the strings with every one of their arms,
Perfectly in-tune for us.
This is an opportunity never befallen on two humans before.
Was I wrong the first time?
We can together know and feel what not one other has ever.
You want to attain and go through
Experiences?
This is one that you will
Never find again. The first of it's kind;
We can be influential to everyone following us.
Lead them to where we are.
Reinvent in them our discovery of the Love that we [humans] We're meant to have.
Does this not sound like what you
And I were sent here to be?
Is it not what your divine purpose and role has always been predestined for;
To be Aphrodite dressed in agape in the flesh?]

You are the isolated occurrence of me.
There is nothing more giving me breath,
Moving my blood.
You are my love which is all that I am.
For if you keep continuing,
To let me drink from you--your lips,
We will not wake from this(perfection)
Ever again.

This poison illumine we've found in one another
Is the only cure
For living in this world that we were
and have been born into.
I am your answer
and you shine
As the reply to,
"I am my lover's, and he is mine."



Never before
have I been so certain.
Come with me as one again;
yet forevermore.
My love.
In this standstill,
Will you free me
From my lack of you entirely?




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This was well written. However, I am guessing the reason why it has yet to be critiqued is that it is rather long, and a little difficult to "get". I don't really get it myself - I like the language, and the overall poem, but reading something of this length which I don't understand begins to get somewhat tedious. That's not to say that it is not a good piece, because it is.
Matt.



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