Sunset

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Half the sun shown on the horizon

Dust and sand settled as did the sun

Darkness will soon come

And the light soon will go

Colors are shining until moonbeams show




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I like this. It's simple, but it has RHYME!! Goodie, I love rhymes, cos I can never rhyme successfully myself. I like the last line best, it rounds it off nicely.

-Twit
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Wow, that was really nice.
I always try to write something about nature... but I always end up writing a novelette for teens... lol
Your really good for your age.

-Em to the Ily
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Very nice concept. The ryme almost seemed unintentional..very good. It needs a significant amount of development, though.



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