Death (Desperado Danny In Despair)

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I wrote this when I was fourteen, I wasn't writing happy stuff back then.
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"Desperado Danny In Despair" (original title)
[ Published under the title, "Death" ]


They came to my cell and told me, "it's time."
I was born a mute, so I had to mime.
They walked me down to the dreaded room,
I sat down upon the chair of doom.
They placed the black material over my skull,
I began to shake like a frightened bull.
They pulled the switch, I began to see red.
I sucked in my last breath, then I was dead.
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by Fabien Belcourt
October 2002


Don't believe this poem was published? Yeah, I couldn't believe it either at the time. A bit of a shock for a fourteen year old a few months shy from his fifteenth birthday. Published in 'Sailing Away' by The Poetry Institute of Canada. The age range is thirteen to eighteen and there's a new contest every year.

YOUNG CANADIAN WRITERS! - Email poetryinstitute@shaw.ca for details pertaining to contest rules, dates and such. Good luck!
Last edited by Fabien on Wed Apr 18, 2007 8:39 pm, edited 2 times in total.
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but we needed no beauty
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That was a sort of eerie poem where it mixed in suddenness with the rhyme scheme that just made it creepy. Is this a dream you had, or something real that happened?




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i really like your poetry, like Sez said, it is quite eerie but i love it allthe same.

Well done on getting this published! (you wrote this when you were 14?? well done again lol)

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Fabien, I really liked this for some reason. I'm mean it was a little depressing, but me (being almost 14) can I guess understand that and relate to it...well not dying but just the way you were feeling at the time. All my poetry is dark and depressing right now so yeah....Anyways It was very nice and I enjoyed spending the time reading and commenting. So keep it up!

*Lindsay*
"After it happened I thought that I'd just try to live as normally as possible and bury it, but things like that don't stay buried. I didn't think it would, but it taints your whole life."

"My desires were bestial, obviously." -Jeffery Dahmer.



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