Yea, I have to agree...I'm not entirely sure I'd call this is poem.
Foul language is actually acceptable in poetry, even on this forum. It needs to be given a proper rating and I believe that the foul language needs to fit into the piece....here I think you might be trying to model the piece around the language and to me that is not good.
Also, I must ask that you plz uz propr englsh whn typn and proper punctuation in your piece because if you don't then it becomes one long drawn out sentence that one must say aloud in one breath and it will cause a string of suffocation deaths due to lack of air to these readers who are simply innocent passerbyers and then you will get sued for murder and will get thrown in jail for years until you are old and bitter and you repeat this particular poem over and over again in your cell until you finally die of suffocation yourself from your one long runon piece of literature. Thanks.