Is it a haiku? I couldn't offer you any crit on it. I'm not much of a haiku person and because it's all so short and theres all sorts of hidden meaning I wouldn't be able to suggest anything so...
I like it, nice word choice, interesting subject, ends well. About all I can say.
Sing we for joy and idleness,
Naught else is worth the having. -- Ezra Pound
You're wrong about humanity. They are your greatest creation because they're better than you are. Sure, they're weak, and they cheat and steal and destroy and disappoint, but they also give and create, and they sing and dance and love. Above all, they never give up. — Metatron
