Is it a haiku? I couldn't offer you any crit on it. I'm not much of a haiku person and because it's all so short and theres all sorts of hidden meaning I wouldn't be able to suggest anything so...
I like it, nice word choice, interesting subject, ends well. About all I can say.
Sing we for joy and idleness,
Naught else is worth the having. -- Ezra Pound
We shall not cease from exploration, and the end of all our exploring will be to arrive where we started and know the place for the first time. — T.S. Eliot
