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Suffocation

Stuck in the middle,
In the heaving mass.
Squashed, everything squeezing.
Suffocating in the crush,
The life squeezing out of me.
Slowly, it is slipping out of my soul.
Finally the life is gone,
I am a hollow,
Crusty,
Holed out,
Lifeless shell.
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This has been done many times before. One question. Is the suffocation literal or figurative? Because that makes all the difference in the world.
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Well obviously it has been done many times, who doesn't feel suffocated at least once in their life??
at the time of writing figurative, but before it was written, literal.
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It feels like my chest is caving in, my ribs are pressing against my vital organs, I struggle to draw in breaths, they're drawn in ragged and exhaled in a wheeze.

Edit - The first part reminded me of a delerium induced fever that I had a few weeks ago. Apologies for what I wrote originally, it was a tad much.

- Fabien
Last edited by Fabien on Sun Apr 08, 2007 1:52 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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It had a perfectly round door like a porthole, painted green, with a shiny yellow brass knob in the exact middle. The door opened on to a tube-shaped hall like a tunnel: a very comfortable tunnel without smoke, with panelled walls, and floors tiled and carpeted, provided with polished chairs, and lots and lots of pegs for hats and coats—the hobbit was fond of visitors. The tunnel wound on and on, going fairly but not quite straight into the side of the hill —The Hill, as all the people for many miles round called it—and many little round doors opened out of it, first on one side and then on another.
— JRR Tolkien