No more crying

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No reason to cry.
This thing’s no longer a life.
That’s ended.
No reason to cry.
This thing’s no longer a life.
That’s ended.

Wait until we meet again,
and just hold me baby.
It is so hard to pretend
that you mean nothing to me.

This is something I’ve just realized
that affects my whole life.
It’s hard to be alone
But there’s no reason oh…

No reason to cry.
This thing’s no longer a life.
That’s ended.
No reason to cry.
This thing’s no longer a life.
That’s ended.

I’ve stopped wishing I were her.
I’ve taken my own path.
I just wanted to confer.
That this isn’t my last…

time coming into your life.
I love you. I’ll say it again.
She can’t have you, she lied
because you’re still my friend.

No reason to cry.
This thing’s no longer a life.
That’s ended.
No reason to cry.
This thing’s no longer a life.
That’s ended.

Now it’s over and it’s done.
I’ll try for you no longer.
It’s now your turn to run
and I get to be stronger.

I can’t wait until I’m free
This burning passion leaves my soul
You no longer hold me
And I am free to go.


No reason to cry.
This thing’s no longer a life.
That’s ended.
No reason to cry.
This thing’s no longer a life.
That’s ended.
I love, love.
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Overall, liked it. Except for in the line "This thing's no longer a life", do you mean "alive?" I think it makes more sense that way.

Otherwise, great jub! :mrgreen:
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i liked it it was good.......ttyl.....keep up the good work^_^




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this poem was good it really stood out to me




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I really liked it. Great job :)
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Hey Rieda,

I really liked this. It has a lovely flow, a clear message and even though this topic has been written about a million times I find it special.

No reason to cry.
This thing’s no longer a life.
That’s ended.
No reason to cry.
This thing’s no longer a life.
That’s ended.


Your chorous works ver well because of its simplicity. It keeps the song from getting too wrdy and still has a lot of feeling in it.

I’ve stopped wishing I were her.
I’ve taken my own path.
I just wanted to confer.
That this isn’t my last…

time coming into your life.
I love you. I’ll say it again.
She can’t have you, she lied
because you’re still my friend.


I love the way you connected these two verses.

Sorry, I can't say anything helpful, but that it should stay the way it is and I'd love to hear it with music :)

All the best,
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Riedawriter23 wrote:No reason to cry.
This thing’s no longer a life.
That’s ended.
No reason to cry.
This thing’s no longer a life.
That’s ended.

Wait until we meet again,
and just hold me baby.
It is so hard to pretend
that you mean nothing to me.

This is something I’ve just realized
that affects my whole life.
It’s hard to be alone
But there’s no reason oh…

No reason to cry.
This thing’s no longer a life.
That’s ended.
No reason to cry.
This thing’s no longer a life.
That’s ended.

I’ve stopped wishing I were her.
I’ve taken my own path.
I just wanted to confer.
That this isn’t my last…


time coming into your life.
I love you. I’ll say it again.
She can’t have you, she lied
because you’re still my friend.

No reason to cry.
This thing’s no longer a life.
That’s ended.
No reason to cry.
This thing’s no longer a life.
That’s ended.

Now it’s over and it’s done.
I’ll try for you no longer.
It’s now your turn to run
and I get to be stronger.

I can’t wait until I’m free
This burning passion leaves my soul
You no longer hold me
And I am free to go.


No reason to cry.
This thing’s no longer a life.
That’s ended.
No reason to cry.
This thing’s no longer a life.
That’s ended.[/quote]

This is really good, Rieda. I love the chorus and all the verses, It's a sad but sweet poem. I liked how you showed so much emotion into this piece. I love the rhyming and rhythm a lot. I do want to qoute a couple verses though.

This is something I’ve just realized
that affects my whole life.
It’s hard to be alone
But there’s no reason oh…


The last line in that kills the rhythm you had going. What do you mean by "oh..."?

I’ve stopped wishing I were her.
I’ve taken my own path.
I just wanted to confer.
That this isn’t my last…


What do you mean by "confer"? I fon't understand that. I do like the rhyming in that verse though.

Other than that, very good work, Rieda. Keep up the good work.

-Rick.




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I liked this. I got a bit of a tune going on it, and I thought it was a little different from a lot of popular music, but still close to it.

Sorry I can't be of more help, lyrics aren't my thing. But I really liked it.
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It's very graphic, thats one of the things il ove about your work, theres lots of imagery in it, its a pleasure to read =]

The lyrics really have so much meaning, theres so much in there.

It flows and you can imagine a melody behind it, it really works ^.^

Its passionate, has got feeling, and it works, thats all i can say, it works really well =]

It's quite sylish, i dont know if it falls under any real genre, its ike romance alternative i guess ^_^

Anyway, tis amazing =]

Keep it up, Eva XxXxX
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