sadness

every time i see you cry you make me cry
every time i see your heart break my heart break es
every time i see you weep you make me weep
but if you became happy once again i will be happy to
so remember every time you feel let down if let down as well

its ok

It's nice enough in its sentimentality but it doesnt really offer anything new because it sort of builds upon the "if you cry, I cry" version of love, without offering much else.

I think you just need to extend it more adding some more original ideas. It reads more as prose than as poetry right now.

its sweet, but it feels like there should be more to it.