A lo-o-ong

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A lo-o-ong so-o-ong
a Shórt port
a tall ball
a (fat) bat
A nice rice

and a annoying poem!!!!


(Reply quick!!!!!!!! you dipstick!!!!!!!!!)




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Makes no sense, you're just mucking around. Please keep your random musings to yourself. Write something properly.


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ok. I thought I was weird but you are a whole new level.
funny poem though...
please be serious next time
but u may have started a new style of poem
Charlotte




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Erm, for the books, you need to use 'an' instead of 'a' in your last line.

and a annoying poem!!!!


Also, ration the exclaimation point. They're so overused :? .

Well, better luck next time?
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hmmm.....are you posting this just to get replies? to be honest, it sounds like you have just puushed a few words together
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I agree with everyone else.

Do be serious next time.

If you were serious, the addition at the end did not help at all. I don't think any of us appreciate you fooling around.

:(




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The YWS is not a place to post your "thrown together in 5 seconds and has no meaning at all--I just like it because it rhymes" poems. Here we give feedback on poems and writings for serious writers. Please be considerate of the time we are all wasting on this.

Thank you.
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worse poem ever

are u sure your 49!
It's priest have a little priest




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I agree with everyone, this poem doesn't rhyme properly and the grammar is wrong.



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