*laughs* This just completely made my day. Honestly.
It's very cute, you have a nice rhyme scheme going on, and the best part: you know how to keep rhythm! The first two lines are shorter (in syllables) than the rest of the poem, so they almost lead you in, and then it's sticky chaos 'til the end!
Gah. I cannot tell you how much this made me smile. I love it!
That was a good poem. It was a bit short but because it was short it was good. I think if you had extended it it would've been a completely different poem. I like the way you make it rhyme. I am not very good at rhyming so i could use some tips.
It doesn't think, doesn't feel. It doesn't laugh or cry. All it does from dusk 'till dawn is make the soldiers die
It made me laugh and want to read it all over again - which I did, because I'm a loon.
What I will say is though... Will you add some more? There is a lovely simplicity about the shortness of this, but I think that if you added some more, it would be so great; that I'd have to read it three times!
Heehee. ^_^ I love your poems, Goldie. "Monsters Under my Bed" and "Jam".
I have absolutely nothing to add to the above, and this is turning into the horrid crit of the kind I abhor, so I would only suggest to replace one of the "sticky"s with something else, though you might not want to do that because it might botch the lovely rhythm you've got going here. ^_^
