Young Writers Society

Lady comes like a shaking skin
Call me back to the green place
Night is were I'm headed.

Wire and shattered glass
Construct
Golem
Mud man
Skin covered in words -
Like blood -
That I wrote
And cannot ecsponge.

Come down off
Your exquisite high
Trembling with every breath
Hold the hands of terror and beauty -
They will be your companions.

Fish scale promises cling in your hair
Fire glows around you
Still want to kiss you though,
Touch that place above your hip,
In the comfort between
Concave and concave -
Convex and convex
Softness
Likeness
Symetry
Forbidden-
This little catch.

You stand there clothed in leaves and armor
Image of perfect composition
Backed by dicroic space
Your voice fills me
With something more pliant -
Than ivory hope -
Something curling
And hot.


*please review.

I have read it five times. I don't know perfectly what it means. but this is what I understood.
The person search for a hope and finds it. Even though it's not you know it's not allowed, you still do. Holding on strong you fight against it because that your pride or hope. And last you find what you want.

Is that it? or Something like that? correct me if I misunderstood.
If it's like how I thought if was..It's great.. I love it when a person's feeling shows that he/she is never giving up. Standing strong. Though if that's not what you meant you still did show me a short happening that tells much.

The words you use is for me a little confusing but came more clearly the fifth time I read it. still they are right words that you used.
Nice work!!!

Write on ~xxx little x soldier xxx~

thsi is nice, i like. erm...didnt really understand what it was about hmmm...but maybe i need to read it again to get a deeper insight to what you are talking about. however nice words used and nice title.

This was very well-written and poignant. The line about the "fish scale promises" seems almost funny, but beautiful at the same time. This poem conveyed an almost dreamy, sweet desire for...what? The emotion is clear, but the goal I'm not so sure of. (If that made sense...argh...no, it didn't.) Even so, the words are all that matter, and the words are lovely. Kudos to you.

though the point is hard to find its so well written the words sending you to their destination flowing freely and wonderfully, though I feel you may have ot expaling to us the meaning of this poem I did engjoy it so much!
wu