Moments in Mass Silence

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yoha_ahoy
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Mon Jan 22, 2007 10:44 pm
yoha_ahoy says... · Mon Jan 22, 2007 10:44 pm
Moments in Mass Silence

The air becomes thick with thought.
It is a moment of prayer.
I can imagine the dense cloud
floating over the heads of the congregation.
It is a smokey purple,
with images quickly flickering about.
Images of sorrow and joy,
and confusion.
I am the only one who looks about,
wondering what thoughts I am barely perceiving.
Last edited by yoha_ahoy on Mon Jan 22, 2007 11:07 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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Mon Jan 22, 2007 10:48 pm
piepiemann22 says... · Mon Jan 22, 2007 10:48 pm
I like it. You need to add punctuation first before I can determine the flow. Do that and I shall return.
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— Kate Chopin, The Awakening