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The individual leads in actual fact a double life, one in which he is an end to himself and another in which he is a link in a chain which he serves against his will or at least independently of his will.
--SIGMUND FREUD
i really liked the metaphors you had in this. the connections of poetry and the real world made a lot of sense after thinking about it.
i liked the surreal feeling you had in this (if you were going for that anyway). there's a lot that is being said, but it feels like the reader kind of drifts through it.
sorry that this doesn't help much... but i really liked this poem and i only have feedback for it.
