Wondering

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VERSE 1
Why do you always think the worst of me,
am i really that bad,
or do you just really hate me,
cuz i no i hate me.
im not worthy enough for you,
and this place.
i should just leave,
find somewhere that wants me,
but where???

CHORUS
I wish this would all go by,
and leave me alone,
so i can live in peace,
with out crying every night
and wondering if things will ever change.

VERSE 2
i remember when you used to tell me,
that you loved me,
that you cared and hoped i'd do well.
But now you just don't care,
you wouldn't even noitice it i died,
which is what i should do,
Just die.

CHORUS
I wish this would all go by,
and leave me alone,
so i can live in peace,
with out crying every night
and wondering if things will ever change.

VERSE 3
As i look at you one last time,
i mumble I LOVE YOU!!
but you dont hear me,
then i drift away,
into my own place.
You shed one tear and move on,
cuz I'm not worth your tears.




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I don't know anything else to say other than WOW. That was amazing.
when there's nowhere to go, it's time to grow up.




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Nice. I love the last verse especially. :wink:
"You can go a long way with a smile. You can go a lot farther with a smile and a gun." -Al Capone




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If you used proper grammar, it would be a lot more powerful. I agree, I like the last verse.




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Yes I also liked the last verse alot. The first one could use some working on and so could the grammar. But you sum it all up very good.




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may be u should check ur spellings...they are mistaken especially in verse 2.
its good work any way. i like it.
i know you are dry
but that does`nt mean you should cry
get up and fly
fly reallly high
up to the deep blue sky




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It's really awesome, but it could use some grammar.

im not worthy enough for you,
and this place.
i should just leave,
find somewhere that wants me,
but where???


I think this would be better as:
"i'm not worthy of you
i should just leave this place
find somewhere that wants me,
but where???"

I thonk it flows better, but ultimately it's up to you.



When I use caps I do not want you to read it like a little screech, I want you to read it like a 5,000 year old ogre with the strength of 10,000 men.
— avianwings47