Mage Chronicles: Draft Two

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Hey all! So, I first posted Mage Chronicles here about a year (maybe less?) ago. I've since completely revamped it and finished it for the second time. I'm looking for someone to read through it and pretty much point out anything that needs fixing. Grammar, plot issues, romance issues, worldbuilding. Whatever needs to be fixed, go ahead and point it out.

Mage Chronicles is a fantasy/romance that deals with LGBT relationships and family dynamics.
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The grand in the hotel rings with broken tunes; the guests frown; the concierge winces. But the blue-hatted boy is happy and braver than they.
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