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Its Always and Forever

All of the "it's" need apostrophes.

Its a life time experience
Its now or its never
Its hard to convince.
Its a one way road
Its the gate to heaven or hell
Its where your hearts bestowed

These two lines have way too many syllables.

Its a magical spell...
Love is a myth.....


But is it for real????

Too many question marks, darling.

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Hey Lexy. I opened this in antipation that it was about the member of the month MYTH. We all love Myth, yaay.

But then I read what you wrote and I thought we already went over this.

Less repetition is better and more powerful.

lexy wrote:Its Always and Forever
Its a life time experience
Its now or its never
Its hard to convince.
Its a one way road
Its the gate to heaven or hell
Its where your hearts bestowed
Its a magical spell...
Love is a myth.....


But is it for real????

Its Always and Forever
and a life time experience
Its now or its never
and hard to convince.
Its a one way road
and the gate to heaven or hell
Its where your hearts bestowed
a magical spell...
Love is a myth.....

anyway, i will let the others comment more, these are my thoughts. I am not sure you explained why it is a myth. Your descriptions indicate that is actually NOT a myth, but tangible. Which reminds me of one more thing, I think the question at the end is a bit redundant.

I'm new to this, but I liked this, and I think it flows well