Lexy's slight bewilderment strengthes the fact it's too wordy and philosophical. I just read the Art of War today by Sun Tzu, and I realized that even such an important document can be so simple. A poem strives to be like a picture (which is supposed to convey a thousand words), only with words! Remember-a thousand words stuffed in a few. Like compressing a computer file thereby reducing space used up, yet retaining all information found therein. At least I think; Incandescence will have the final word! However, know that you have at least one fan who'll be willing to read and understand works in the same format as above. ^_~
Killing For Peace Is Like F#@%ing For Chastity Revolucija Je Sada! Revolucija Je Stobom I Svima! Revolucija Je Uvijek-Zivi Uz Revolucije I Budite Slobodni!
Well, thanks all for the comments -- haven't quite decided whether or not I'm just going to blow this piece off, but if I decide to do a rewrite, I'll certainly try to cut down on the verbosity.
