Anniversary

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As the man studied
the crimson Rorschach test
left on his bathroom wall,
he decided that it reminded him
of a butterfly in a frog's mouth,
or maybe of cat food,
if cats ate brain matter.
"Happy Anniversary."
he whispered to a memory.
He smiled,
and kissed her almost forehead.
"Is", "is." "is" — the idiocy of the word haunts me. If it were abolished, human thought might begin to make sense. I don't know what anything "is"; I only know how it seems to me at this moment. -Robert Anton Wilson




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Well that's bloody creepy, in a very literal sense XD

Literary, too: it certainly strikes the tone you're going for, right on the head. Large and lasting kudos.

Only thought (for now), I think "brain matter" needs to condense to two syllables to make the flow work right. That's about it.

Yeah, neat :)
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Thank you backgroundbob. Your comments are definitely flattering seeing as how you yourself are an exceptional writer and one who's opinions I can trust.
"Is", "is." "is" — the idiocy of the word haunts me. If it were abolished, human thought might begin to make sense. I don't know what anything "is"; I only know how it seems to me at this moment. -Robert Anton Wilson



The fear of death follows from the fear of life. A man who lives fully is prepared to die at any time.
— Mark Twain