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Re: The Masterpiece
Hey there, zsmith here to review. This is a very interesting piece you have here, and quite original as we rarely see something from the bad guy's perspective. I'd like ...
May 17, 2016 -
Re: I am as delicate as a shard of glass
Hey there, zsmith here to review. This was amazing. I don't say that lightly because I don't like poetry usually. It was a little long for a poem though, so ...
May 17, 2016 -
Re: My Best Friend
Hey there, zsmith here to review I liked this piece because it was short and sweet. It was quite an enjoyable read and seemed to describe the perfect friendship. I ...
May 17, 2016 -
Re: Novel (first 4 chapters)
Hey there, zsmith here to review. First of all, I see you're new here so welcome to YWS! This is a great place to talk to like-minded people who'll help ...
May 17, 2016 -
Re: Bright Smiles and Silent Voices
Hey there, zsmith here to review. This piece speaks volumes of sadness, love and simplicity. Your word choice, sentence structure and flow are all excellent. I just have one critique. ...
May 15, 2016 -
Re: It's All Fun and Games
Hey there! I'm usually an action kind of gal, but this drew me in despite just being about a married couple hanging out. You sucked me in with a pleasant ...
Feb 25, 2016 -
Re: I Can't Recall
awwwww no, this made me sad! Why would you do that to me? But seriously. This was really well done. Well written, good word choice, hit me right in the ...
Feb 25, 2016 -
Re: The Night Befote
Hey there, This was a short but entertaining piece of wild youths. Nice! It was too short to have a plot, or even to know if the main character's name, ...
Feb 25, 2016 -
Re: Place Holder
Hey there, cool poem! I only have two critiques: One is that there was no proper punctuation where there should've been. It would really help it flow nicer and be ...
Feb 21, 2016 -
Re: noon
Hey there, zsmith here to review This was really cool and original, very unique and poetic. The format was amazing and acheived exactly what you wanted, it's easy to see ...
Feb 21, 2016 -
Re: Growing
Hey there! This is honestly an amazing poem that I personally relate to on a very deep level and probably resonates with many readers out there. The only critique I ...
Feb 19, 2016 -
Re: All That We Are: Chapter 2
Hey there, it's me again! Back for chapter two, because chapter one was short but enticing. There's something alluring about teen fiction. I think it's the light-heartedness and flashbacks to ...
Feb 16, 2016 -
Re: All That We Are: Chapter 1
Hey there! The first thing that strikes me in the first paragraph is the description - or, lack of. You've done an alright job at setting the scene, but i ...
Feb 16, 2016 -
Re: Brown
Wow, I'm speechless. This was really great. Especially because it's so true. This poem makes me care about an issue that I usually wouldn't care about, it makes me feel ...
Feb 8, 2016 -
Re: Dick and Jane
Wow. This was freakin' awesome. I loved the whole "This is Jane" thing, it was original and entertaining and really put a new spin on things. It sucked me in ...
Feb 8, 2016
