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I think you have a good start for something here, but you should probably add on to it. You left me wondering "What now?" As for the main character, I ...

I really think this story could be developed into something a bit longer. Its good, but I wish I could get to know your character a bit more. As for ...

I know your trying to go for a memoir and therefore you want to focus on the feelings and the thoughts that went through in the very moment that all ...

Hi! I really liked your story. I think your use of imagery is just mesmerizing. As I read I could understand how he found the rain so magical. I would ...

I liked reading this story. I think it has potential, but it needs some work. Like Juniper said, you were trying to create a strong impact on the audience but ...

I loved the Hunger Games. Every chapter ends in total suspense, making the book very addictive. It kept me on the edge of my seat with every passing moment. And ...