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Yes I was a little hesitant to place this in Romantic Short story since it's not really romantic until the end. I might add on to it, but I kept ...

People walk forward slowly, as if their steps weighted more than they should. They are all dressed in black clothes. And they all hold white roses, which they throw into ...

Thanks Katelyn, I'm glad you enjoyed that. I worked on this piece a bit more after the comments I got, but I haven't really expanded it. I'll let you know ...

Thanks for pointing out the mistakes. :) And for enjoying my work. I'll let you know if I add to it. It'll probably take a while, though, I have a ...

Thanks for the reviews! Kaedee: I must admit that when you told me I should extend the ending I didn't think I could do much with it, but it turns ...

She stood up on her pointed silver heals, and straightened herself. The music from the other room bounced against the walls. She stared at her reflection in the mirror. Her ...

Thanks to you both for the reviews! :D I'll keep in mind the recommendations. NumberSeven,you're the second person to point out that the description of the hug sounds strange, so ...

I think you have a good start for something here, but you should probably add on to it. You left me wondering "What now?" As for the main character, I ...

I wrapped my hands around my legs, and wiggled my toes in the sand. The warm summer breeze ruffled my dark hair. I placed a loose curl behind my ear. ...

I really think this story could be developed into something a bit longer. Its good, but I wish I could get to know your character a bit more. As for ...

Mechi: I'm really glad that you like my writing style, and thanks especailly for your comment on my dialougue. I think dialougue is really one of the best ways to ...

Appale: Thanks for the critique! I'll take into consideration the substituting the said (but I must say, "said" is better sometimes :D ), and I will revise the grammar. I'm ...

“Fight! Fight! Fight! Fight!” As much as James wanted to ignore the chants of the teenagers surrounding him, he could not. He was certain, however, that the shouts were not ...

Thank you both for your reviews! I find them really helpful. You're especially right about the ellipsis. :shock: Kind to think about it, I do use them a lot. And ...

“Here,” the man said hanging his small metal crucifix over her neck. “You need this more than I do.” Caroline laughed softly as she wiped the tears from her eyes. ...