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Hello there This is a moving poem. I loved the flow, it's intensity, truth, emotion, imagery and the message. It is definitely well written and I loved every minute of ...

Hello there and welcome to YWS! :) I have never had s'mores before even though I know how they are made but they seem great. I like your piece, it's ...

Hello there I certainly liked the way you describe your situations, I like your writing style. As far as I'm concerned, I spotted no spelling mistakes or anything that needs ...

Hello there At first I could not understand what was going on but after another round through the poem, I get it now (sighs :) ). Wow, I liked it ...

Hello there This was very creative. I liked the last stanza particularly the way it unfolded. I thought though that some of the rhyming was a bit forced, My angel ...

Hello there and welcome once again. I thought this poem lacked a lot of poetic elements and at times it seemed as if I was reading an abstract or idea ...

A world gone by is a world found new A change of time is a change of Hope A decade, a century, an age gone by, Leaving behind a Torch ...

Hello there Thought I'd do the honors! :) Anywho, this was an interesting approach to a poem. I liked the reference of the balloon to real life. I was distracted ...

Hello there clarakingofsnow Hmmm...well, to be honest I'm a little dissapointed; I don't know, you had my hope so high when I got to "ask the stars". I kind of ...

Hello there Jon :) I love it! It's been a while since I've seen poetry of this kind, so deep and real. It was emotional and your choice of words ...

Hello there :) This is my first review of the month! Anyway, your poem is really cute. I had a problem though with the first stanza. To me it was ...

Hello there iheartbooks I am no expert at punctuation either, but what I would suggest when you write a poem, punctuate line by line as you would a sentence. For ...

Hello there and welcome to YWS :) I loved this this story. The sky mirrors the water, just a slur of cloudy grey. Nice! Great use of imgery here. I ...

Hello there You are right about your tenses. I think your other problem is grammar, you need more practice to correct that. Another thing I noticed; you did not develop ...

Hello there :) I think bubblegum has pretty much outlined the spelling errors in the piece. Next time, try to proofread your submission.This really did not strike me as a ...