zephion

Wow, cool idea. I can see some serious potential in this and I can't wait to see the rest, but there are a few things that need fixed. First things ...

Hey, I found it :P. A few things. Cool idea, kinda fitting for your first post. Now, I don't do poetry very often, so I don't know some of the ...

Okay, a few things. First of all, great start! I can see a lot of potential, you should just fix a few things first. Your first few lines: I'm Lenny, ...

Here are some edits that I made: It was the year of 1389. It was the time when soldiers use to come to back home and spent most of their ...

Really cool idea and good description of the characters. I would also recommend some added description to the battle scene. Also, during the fight of Satan and Ethaniel, what is ...

Really cool story, I love it. Just a few things. The first part was a bit fast. It was some really cool description, but if you slowed it down then ...

Where was I? Adrenaline coursed through my body, I tensed up. Something wasn’t right. The men pulled the gun from there belts, slipping of their horses with predatory grace. Great ...