zaid

Awesomely written I must say, very concise and very vivid, full of colors. :D Keep it up Sincerely, Zaid.

I really liked the story, the plot is vividly explained and you kept the reader reading till the end. :D Zaid.

Very awesome work done here. Keep it up. :) Zaid.

Very nice, You trapped the reader with the incompleteness in the start and the abrupt begging. Sincerely, Zaid.

lol great Ill check into that

First things first , There's no rhyming, sometimes the poem doesn't need rhyming but in this case I have a feeling as a reader that it really did need rhyming. ...

The idea is really nice, as well as the similes and metaphors used in the poem. But there is something lacking, It's maintaining the flow, when you're writing you have ...

You've done a great job here. It's really inspiring as well as flawless. I look forward to seeing more of you. Thumbs up. Zaid.

I wish you'd use better language and more appropriate words. Express yourself in a good way with good words. The idea was great but you didn't do it justice. Sincerely, ...

I like the idea but you haven't portrayed it in a right way. Firstly your stanzas are in some places too short and in some places too long, Same is ...

Into oblivion- As i walk alone into oblivion i stop i stop and wonder,how did i come here? wait, wasn't life just perfect a while ago? where'd every one go ...

Hi, I like the idea portrayed in the poem but you've missed out an essential part, you've got to grab the reader, enthrall him/her, and there's only one way to ...

I really like your ideas and the feeling that you've tried to put in it but try using more color words, words that will light up your poetry, Being plain ...

Once upon a time when i was a wee little child In the middle of the night i had a horrible fright Mother!Mother! i cried and she was at once ...