youngwriter

Ok then, Positive things: I liked the start, the build-up to the fighting, and the phrase "The time had come." I liked the phrase because it's such a powerful phrase ...

This is a really good poem! Almost every line flowed together perfectly, and the descriptions were great! I loved the lines; "His name: Taboo," "As I gazed at the blue ...

Good story so far, but starting with the character is a bit cliched, no offence. Maybe you could start with her walking to school after she'd seen the shadow? For ...

Ikerot, To start, wow! The descriptions and the thoughts were spot on, I could imagine being there with Elise! The fact that she started the fire makes me want to ...