yombleflobber

You have a good grasp of realism here, and I like the setting. I didn't notice any grammatical errors (perhaps because I wasn't looking for them, since the story flowed ...

Well, it's kinda sad, and it sounds very cinematic. I can almost hear swelling violin music, followed by a muffled explosion. I have a few questions about this, namely, "is ...

Well, it was good: I didn't see any obvious typos, glaring grammatical errors or such; the story flowed smoothly and the tone was, while somewhat apathetic, quite appropriate for the ...