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Ooh! I loved the sitting one. You captured a very sweet moment quite nicely. ^_^

Hehehe... thanks Rieda and Lucy. Yeah, about snow days... we hadn't had any in years either until this year. We've had four now, two of which were back-to-back in a ...

Hehe! Thank you. Lucky... we almost had a snow day today. But, mmmm... chocolate. ^_^ If only. >.< *doom & gloom* :wink: ~Yoyo

Yeah, I totally agree with you. I just wasn't to sure. Thank you! :D

Thank you! I will fix the mistakes you pointed out. Thank you for being so helpful! It means a lot to me! And chapter two is coming soon. :wink: ~Yoyo

Chapter One In a small, obscure shipbuilding town on the coast of England, there was an orphanage. In this orphanage, there was a boy, as there were many since it ...

Thank you! I would post chapter one sometime today but I left my writing at school. It shall have to wait until tomorrow. *sigh* Stupid exams.

Done.

Capitalize the word 'I' and use spell check before you post anything, please.

Thank a lot guys! The title... well, I suck at naming things but if you notice through out the story I tend to reference breathing a lot. His breath rate, ...

Yeah, it's meant to be sort of cryptic. Part of the story. Everything isn't discovered yet, so that's the next part of the advanture for my characters. :D But alas, ...

Pretty is good! ^_^ Thank you. I'll put some punctuation in.

Anyone else care to comment? :?

Very interesting story, I agree. I just think it's great that you can tie a love story together with a spoon. :P Very original. Great job!

Hmm... I see your point. I was never good at lyrics but I could see how this could definitely move in that direction. Thanks! ~Yoha