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Thanks everyone! Especially hekate and Heather. :D That's very helpful and I thing I'll use your first suggestion on reworking the beginning of that Heather. Thanks. :) I'll try to ...

I don't know what it was about this, but I really love it. Hm. Very affective. ~Yoyo

All the iiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii's burn my eyes. *cries* Ants, Bugtopia... goal-den crayon eatery... P.P.S You are one funny 100 year old man. O.o

Gorgeous piece! The imagery is wonderful, and the language you use is beautiful as well. No complaints! Keep writing! ~Yoyo 8)

Seree, you're asking be to write a different story than this is. And you're also asking me to change my writing style. I appreciate your advice here, but I don't ...

Wow! I'm so flattered on the amount of feedback on this and the reactions! And thanks for your suggestions on fixes PerforatedxHearts, and you suggestion on it being publishable! I ...

Hm, yeah, I know it isn't great. I was mad at the time. I don't write as well when I'm emotional. Sorry my emo-ness came out. XD It made sense ...

Augh! Space your paragraphs and I'll come back. Please!!

Anyone else? :|

Thanks Seree and chayonz. And no, I never did find him. :( I was stupid for not doing anything. I seriously could have. It was just weird, the connection that ...

Thanks Syd and aussie. Hehe... me likes choloclate. *wipes up drool* Um, yeah I know what you mean about extending this though. I typically do short poetry like this, but ...

Thanks! Some of that you misunderstood though (1, 3), and others are stylistic choices (7, 8, 9) and I will not be changing those. But thanks for catching the others! ...

Thanks for the positive reviews guys! I'm really happy with how this one turned out. And I'm really glad you didn't find this to fall under your typical "dpressing love ...

Yes, you are correct pain. And thatks guys for the crits! :)

Thanks guys. Maybe I'll work on it. Maybe not. It isn't hugely important. *shrug* Just playing around. :) chocoholic: Thanks for the other critique too. ^^ And from reading that ...