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Hey there. I can't exactly give a full review because your story is too short. Try making it a little longer. Although this one was good. You decribed the mother ...

Thanks wookielover17 :) That definitely made my day.. :)

I continued this: * * * * * * * * * “Found her yet?” One of the guys said. Another guy who sounded like he was in the kitchen ...

Hey there, Great story, sorry but i didn't get to read the first chap. Maybe i'll do it later. But anyway, this was nice. You didn't have so much mistakes ...

Hey there! nice story. I could definitely feel it's like a fairytale of some sort. I didn't get the italized paragraphs at first but now i do. Anyway, there's not ...

hey there writewatiwant :) Good story. I was a bit bothered by your writing but i was caught up in it that it didn't matter. Anyway, i didn't see many ...

Thank you for your comment Barney.

Looks like all your typos and mistakes have been pointed out. Anyway, your story was short but you did a good job in describing. I hope you write more. i's ...

Thank you Discodiva. Um, i didn't realize until just now that my avatar (Taylor) has a song Tell me Why. I don't know of this piece was named after her ...

thanks iheartlondon! Thanks for pointing out Pam's typos. The romance comes later on by the way :)

Okay, my friend Pam is too shy to post her work so i'm doing it for her :) (but we both made this) please correct any of our mistakes and ...

Hey, I'm Massie and obviously im new here :) I joined this forum because my friend is too shy to post her own story. so i'm doing it for her. ...