yelhsa211

Your story is great! But I have some advice. Split your paragraphs up, and try to fix the diologue. It was very confusing. other than that, you are VERY good.

Hi! I havn't seen you before. Now, before I delve into the story, I'd like to tell you that the plot for this story is awesome. Now, there were alot ...

This is my second try at writing. In the prologue, I wrote it in third person, but because this is from a different point of view I figured it wouldn't ...

Okay! I really enjoyed this story. I think it's cool how you took the dracula story and made it your own. I'm new too. So, I've got just a little ...

I just edited alot, so everyone Please give me some feed back. Thanks to those of you who have.

I love your story. I just have a tiny suggestion. When I read the first paragraph, I noticed it had alot of commas. You might want to fix that. But ...

Hey Guys! Thanks for the suggestions. I went back and edited it, and now it seems better. I'm new to this stuff, but I like how people can help others ...

I just got all of your messages, and I do realize that I need to work with the feelings a bit. As the mind-numbing blackness of the Change faded away, ...

Greetings! I just signed up yesterday, but this site is already really cool. THere are awesome people here.see yah!

I have also read the prologue, and this story has got me hooked. You need to start on a second chapter. I will read that one, and the one after ...

I really like this story. Your character is pretty strong, and I adore her. This world needs some strong heroines, or heros, whichever you prefer. You said you just wrote ...

Very good story, I thought. This is one of the first ones I have personally read, and I am not disappointed. There were some mistakes, though, with the punctuation. Some ...

Hey, I really liked your story! I've just read the prologue, And now you have went and got me hooked. One of the only things that confuse me is that ...

Your story is awesome! This is the first one I've read, and I really like it. I'm sure you've heard this over and over, but I think you should use ...