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Re: Just for you.
Nice concise piece of poetry :) Every second we're together my senses become alive That is my favourite line as it really shows the emotion and I feel as though ...
Jun 14, 2011 -
Re: Yellow Plus Red (Contest Entry)
Wow. Such a vivid description of both the physical objects and people but also of the raw emotions that have the reader hooked on your every word. I wake up ...
Jun 14, 2011 -
Re: End
What will happen when it all comes to an end? Quite a morbid opening line, however it very effectively grabs the readers attention and you carry on grasping the feelings ...
Jun 14, 2011 -
Re: 42 (edited)
i enjoyed it, but at times instead of using dialogue i think you should use the character thinking instead. It engages the reader more :) but otherwise...good ;)
Mar 4, 2009