xliz101x

Nice concise piece of poetry :) Every second we're together my senses become alive That is my favourite line as it really shows the emotion and I feel as though ...

Wow. Such a vivid description of both the physical objects and people but also of the raw emotions that have the reader hooked on your every word. I wake up ...

What will happen when it all comes to an end? Quite a morbid opening line, however it very effectively grabs the readers attention and you carry on grasping the feelings ...

i enjoyed it, but at times instead of using dialogue i think you should use the character thinking instead. It engages the reader more :) but otherwise...good ;)