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thanks! =] when i look at it that way, i see what you mean.

thanks kris! =] i'll def. fix that up!

She walks across the room Awaiting her frightful doom A sword of thoughts crash through her brain Driving her restless mind absolutely insane She's waiting for her knight of shining ...

So amazing! I love the honesty and how romantic it is! The discriptions are awesome and so is the imagery you create! I love the unexpected ending, like the person ...

Actually I posted a new version in Other Poetry, if you wanna see it.

It wasn't as bad as some made it seem. Some of the questions were brutally honest and I actually get what you're trying to say. I guess it's all a ...

Anger engulfs her like an intoxicating smoke Grabbing onto her, holding her, making her choke This world will never learn how to stop spinning lies Never learn to tell the ...

Aahah yes i know =] But thanks again for your criticism. I've already started the second draft, as I guess you'd call it, and I'm almost done. =] I'll post ...

Oh my goodness! A completely heartfelt poem. It's amazing in every way, and left me wanting more; although it's long ^__^ You can never have enough of something that's good, ...

I'm sorry if I come across as harsh, but this is DISGUSTING. What is the point, like many have commented already, of this? I do not feel anything out of ...

Really goood! It definitley has some heart in it and the descriptions are amazing. One thing though, I agree with what someone said already, you should take out this part ...

Amazing! It's so heartfelt and real, and what I love is that each reader can take it and interpret it in their own way, sculpting individual feelings =] As far ...

Hey there Nathan =] Welcome! I'm new too, just joined yesterday. So far so good! Everyone's really welcoming and nice. =]

Amazing! I definitley felt what you meant and the description was fantastic! =]

Thanks for the critiques =] Alright Snoink will do. The reason it's like this is because I originally wrote it for a poetry slam in my school and since I'm ...