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Re: Forever Suffocated
I really liked this. It wasn't too much, or too little. It was really good and keep up the nice writing. -Angie.
Oct 22, 2010 -
Re: Fading Away
"Lexey! Lexey, wake up. Please wake up!" I heard someone calling my name. My eyes felt heavy on my face and I couldn't bring myself to open them. I wanted ...
Aug 10, 2010 -
Re: A Yellow Star
Like everyone else, this story was chilling. I liked how you told it though. Writing from the point of view of a little kid brought such pure and innocence to ...
Jul 24, 2010 -
Re: Free
Hey there, I LOVE this story. It was really cute and the way you told it did switch between tenses but it was very good. Your descriptions were beautiful, especially ...
Jul 23, 2010 -
Re: The Event
Hi, I really like your story and the idea. There are a few mistakes throughout it but overall I loved reading it. In a couple of sentences, make sure to ...
Jul 23, 2010 -
Re: The old girl
I really love this poem! The way you told it was really cool and it was fun to read. The first stanza has a little uneven flow. Like they said ...
Jul 23, 2010 -
Re: A Glimpse of Hope
There are somethings in life that you just can't change. Like the fact that your parents could care less about you and what you do. They weren't always like that ...
Jul 20, 2010 -
Re: Three Letters
I really loved this poem. The rhyme scheme is really nice and your play on the words I Love You was great. It was a cute and simply poem that ...
Jul 20, 2010 -
Re: William
This piece is really good. You describe everything so well and it created an imagine in my mind. The story sent emotions that were sort of mixed and that's what ...
Jul 19, 2010 -
Re: Footsteps
"Andrew, you have to get here fast! Please, please, please," my breath came fast and jagged. I was near hysterics as I clung to the phone and dial who I ...
Jul 16, 2010 -
Re: I'll Never Understand
This is a well written and very powerful story. I felt the emotions and besides a couple of minor errors it was remarkable. I really like it and enjoyed reading ...
Jul 15, 2010 -
Re: What I've Always Known
I never thought that love could sneak up on you so fast and suck you in. I wasn't ready for what hit me so hard in the chest that there ...
Jul 14, 2010 -
Re: Depression
I love how you kept the same poem but from two different perspectives. In the third stanza, you could add more detail but I like how you don't know exactly ...
Jul 14, 2010 -
Re: This Guy.
He is a unique guy that I talk to all the time. This guy is a guy I take all my problems to, knowing he will listen. I'm not really ...
Jul 14, 2010 -
Re: Darkness.
I'm shaking inside, its so intense I'm killed by all of the silent suspense. the night overpowers my natural defense, screams and cry's are very immense. I'm taken by my ...
Jul 7, 2010
