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This piece is quite long so if people don't like the first part, I probably won't post the rest I hope you enjoy the beginning and be completely honest with ...

Thanks for your criticism! I've read over the rules and have now reviewed four pieces, and I have to say that everyone on this website is really talented! I've already ...

A very abstract piece. Quite interesting, different from usual take on short stories, I like the sense of mystery around the people who are commanding the main character You use ...

I like the build up throughout the chapter and the surprise at the end (someone pulls her back) and look forward to finding out who this was. You have some ...

This worked really effectively because, like said in other comments, the penny has been given human feelings which suggests that all inanimate objects, including the cushion, has a conscience. There ...

Really good start, I like how there are two main settings, the present (Marissa's bedroom) and the past memories of her and Brad's relationships. I think you should use flashbacks ...

this is the first thing i've submitted to the forum it's a short story i wrote a few months ago, i appreciate feedback & criticism! ending's not too cheerful, i ...