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Although I really love your writing, I can’t stand your characters this time around. There’s nothing original about them. Your main character- undeniably beautiful, super cool, with a fiery attitu

hi ninjacookies! I've been wanting a few more opinions on the first 3 chapters to a vampire story i've been writing. they don't have to be really in-depth reviews, but ...

hey i would love another opinion on and those are the first three chapters on a story i've started writing, but i've hit a bit of a writer's block and ...

Note: Leave feedback, because I'm not sure if I'm gonna continue this story :] Misery hung in the air around me, but I was completely and utterly alone. i don't ...

key kerza :) wow this is way different than your werewolf story! i love it so far, not much to say except that I can't wait for more. keep me ...

I thought this was really great! The first part was amazing, but I got bored in the middle part. The beginning started off really good- we got to see Ayden ...

haha that's why i put 'miraculously' in there. Because it does seem pretty unbelievable. And the reason he had to keep driving is because if he would've kept running, the ...

wow not that i know one thing about fashion, but i really love these! i'm very impressed! i don't have anything bad to say about the designs :) I have ...

i really liked this because i could totally picture this psychopathic girl kind of contemplating the meaning of 'psychopathic'. It seems like a very mental thing to do, and i ...

His first step out the door was nearly a fatal one. In the time since he arrived at the motel, a violent storm activated. Rain was coming down in heavy ...

I don’t understand why they had to make a path for Ayden. Couldn’t she just tell her mom she was spending the night or something? Or if she was sneaking ...

I ran over to her without thinking and brushed a few whisps of her that had fallen from her braid out of her face. Some of her auburn hair had ...

Now the next part I really couldn’t find anything wrong with. You can throw all kinds of comic relief in here, the playfulness between Kara and Mareck was great, and ...

So here’s review #2! First of all I’m going to split this into 2 chapters for you because like I said this is way too long. I think the spot ...

I liked this! :) it was really interesting, and a great sample of your story. could you give me a PM when you put more up? I would love to ...