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Re: Elyse- Ch2
The next few days dragged on at an impossibly slow rate. Mom seemed to show up at the house more often (maybe it was just my imagination), but I avoided ...
Aug 7, 2010 -
Re: The Trouble With Titanium-- Ch. 1
The Shadow darted down the deserted length of O’Brein Street, his movements as graceful as a very tall, two-legged cat’s against the city’s cracking walls and rough streets. That is ...
Aug 6, 2010 -
Re: Blue Flames and Bloodshot Eyes (Chapter 1)
Stumbling awkwardly over roots concealed in the midnight darkness, Zachary the Vampire ran as fast he could. His fingers were wrapped securely around a small, shiny object, clutched close to ...
Aug 6, 2010 -
Re: New story I'm trying. Sorry, if it's not epic :p ~PBIS 0.1~
Beep, beep, beep, beep. Annette groaned as the shrill alarm beeps woke her from slumber. She pulled the satin laced pillow over her now golden hair and tried to get ...
Aug 6, 2010 -
Re: Love and Other Stupid Emotions<3
The cool breeze rushed over my face and tousled my hair. The rain was coming down just hard enough to drench my hair. Everyone was standing around tears in their ...
Aug 6, 2010 -
Re: Demigod (working title) revised sec. 1
Prologue The silence was more than I could bear. My friends stood on either side of me, but I could do nothing to save them, except the thing that would ...
Aug 6, 2010 -
Re: My Robin Hood Chapt. 4
“I can’t see…” I said. I felt myself turn automatically and slowly, but carefully ran my fingers over his face. A strong jawline, cheeks lined with an occasional scar. I ...
Aug 6, 2010 -
Re: My Robin Hood Chapt. 3
I wiped away my tears that I had been holding in for an hour now. My mother was buying a few spare eggs from our neighbors, Elouise and Richard, and ...
Aug 6, 2010 -
Re: When Night Falls
I think you’re very good at descriptions but seem to overuse them a bit. It felt like you’d go back and forth like ‘there was blood all over the floor’, ...
Aug 4, 2010 -
Re: My Robin Hood Chapt. 2
My heart raced as I rode into town. Robin Hood, I had met The Robin Hood. A smile spread across my face at the thought that he had touched me, ...
Aug 4, 2010 -
Re: My Robin Hood Chapt. 1
Chapter One I have always wondered if the ocean is really a deep blue, and if the sky is a light blue. I wish that I could savor the beauty ...
Aug 4, 2010 -
Re: Moni (ch.1)
Hey Timmie!! :D Alright here comes the review! So I see you already have some great reviews here, and I think they covered all the grammar errors I found. I’ll ...
Jul 28, 2010 -
Re: Wolf Creek: The Quest Chapter One
Sila brushed against my white fur as he walked ahead of me, and I shivered. It was almost pitch black in the woods at night; the wind whistled through the ...
Jul 25, 2010 -
Re: Forgetting Part 2 (edited)
Alright, the hard part is over, now I just have to wait, I think to myself. (put thought in italics )As I linger here I examine my yard,the moon casts ...
Jul 25, 2010 -
Re: A Bolt from the Blue
Congrats on your first post!! :D and welcome to YWS. Looking after pets have lately became my obsession. It's not just an obsession but an activity by which I can ...
Jul 25, 2010
