xXTheBlackSheepXx

I love this design :) A very original character, good job! A few things I noticed: -the eyes are a bit too long -the hair on the top part of ...

The only complaint I have is with the anime girl. It seems like she's just really blocky. The hair doesn't seem like it's real, and the spacing of the eyes ...

It's cute! I'd like to see it colored, though.

His eyes were cold and black like steel. A merciless glint in his eyes masked his face How would a glint in his eyes mask his face ?. His hair ...

Smiling slightly to myself, sure my plan would work, I settled comfortably into my seat. I had some miles to cover before rolling in my success Now there are several ...

It was a sunny day in St. Petersburg, Florida, a Thursday to be exact and most kids were in school that day. Except me. I was boy of average height, ...

I agree with Mizz’s review. She pointed out all the errors I found, so I’m not going to repeat them. You should probably go back and edit through all her ...

He opened his eyes and reached across the floor blindly until his fingers touched furs, and then soft, warm skin. He looked up to make sure she was still there ...

Hi! Here to review :) The night air has a way to seep into the darkest parts of you and help bring them out in ways unimaginable to the human ...

Jeremy and Aniline were outside the gate. “Are you sure about this?” he asked her, stroking her hair. “ Y es.” Her heart was shuddering inside her chest, making her ...

Hi there! :D The sting of infection and fester boiled in the lashes and gashes that marred his back, shoulders and chest. comma after shoulders. Maybe you should say infectionS ...

Hey there! Here are the only nitpicks I could find... You definitely spent time proofreading this before you posted! :D During school, the we go about business as usual. I ...

Hiya :) This is a good start to your story. You established the family life pretty well, but you could still go back and do more. Do the twins have ...

Prologue In Which We Introduce Your Most Pathetic Host; Me I have to say, you got me right off the bat :) Well, the first thing I can tell you ...

There was once a time when the name “Contair” could cause a smile on its listeners faces to blossom within seconds. The opening line seems just a little cluttered. There ...