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Re: Birthday Papers
This is a small little snippet of something I'm working on. Not giving away too much here. Enjoy. Don't kill it. I knocked on her door at 7:49 am. It ...
Jan 24, 2011 -
Re: Nightmares, Bath Towels, and Lemonade
Really enjoyed this from start to finish. The consistency of the lemonade made the ending very satisfactory. Even I feel like lemonade right now. The first paragraph was a little ...
Jan 24, 2011 -
Re: Girls
I very much enjoyed this! Very good work, very well written. It's paced nicely if not perfectly and it's really interesting. I don't think there was anything I didn't like ...
Jan 24, 2011 -
Re: She Wonders Sometimes.
I like the simplicity of this poem. It's short, sweet, and to the point. And I really like the title. That said, this poem was hard for me to understand. ...
Jan 24, 2011 -
Re: Miss Nostalgia
I wrote this about one year ago, on an afternoon where I found myself really angry at somebody, so if you find a line that doesn't make perfect sence, it ...
Aug 16, 2010 -
Re: Listen, it won't ever last forever, so just hear me out
Very well said, very relatable. A lot of emotion in this poem! I especially like the last line, To know that I did you no wrong. I find that the ...
Aug 16, 2010 -
Re: I Look in the Mirror
Although you've already stated it, I do believe the title could have been a little more creative. Your poem is a raw, it speaks the bitter-truth. You depict what so ...
Aug 16, 2010 -
Re: Senses
Something surreal and out there about this poem, but I did in fact enjoy it. Nice pace and not too long or too short. One thing, though; I do not ...
Aug 16, 2010 -
Re: 1 wish
This is a very good portrayal of how much society today wishes to be so much more than they are. Well said. I enjoyed it. In fact, I wish it ...
Aug 16, 2010 -
Re: My Forbidden Love
Enjoyed this. A little predicatable, yes, but I could relate, and that's what poetry is about, I think. Very good, keep up the good work! (:
Aug 16, 2010 -
Re: who is staanding next to youu ?
In your darkest hour , when your sun and moon collide , who is standing next to you ? In your wildest dreams , where you are free to be ...
Aug 11, 2009 -
Re: So Hard To Love Back
Look at that smile. That boy knows how to make a girl blush. His laugh makes the butterflies in my tummy turn into bats. Laid back, but he`s shy. Quiet ...
Aug 11, 2009
