writingangel24xx

"Sara, it's been 465 days, and I'm still waiting for tomorrow" I really like this line, although I'm not sure why. I guess it captures the length of time that ...

This is good, but I feel like I don't know enough about the speaker. However, I loved your metaphor, "gossamer on the wall." Who would have thought of that? It's ...

I really like this, although I liked it better at the end than the beginning, which I thought was a little boring, but I guess you have to get the ...

Hi! I think that you write well, and this is interesting, but I have a few suggestions. Try not to use cliche words and phrases, and really think out-of-the-box to ...

This is pretty good. I like the description of the setting. It paints a vivid picture in my mind's eye, but I still feel really confused about what's going on ...

Hey! This is really well-written. It sounds like an interesting first chapter and the characters seem to act as foils for each other. It will be neat to see where ...

Why do the same drops that persuade you to dance so energetically under their shower sing you into a motionless sleep at night? I love this line. More lines like ...

This is good and it flows nicely. The descriptions are not too obvious. I've noticed that some young writers have the tendency to always state things, like he had long ...

I read this chapter, but unfortunately didn't read the other chapters before it. I'm guessing I just read the climactic event of the story. Your story sounds really professional and ...

I like the idea of this novel. Although it was a fantasy novel, the dialogue from a mortal perspective was very believable..lol if that makes sense. I also didn't want ...

Sounds like this will make for an interesting novel, but I think it could be even better if you choose more unique imagery and words. Maybe you could add some ...

This was quite good and I wanted to keep reading it..although in the beginning of it I thought it was a cliche novel like any other..but I had to admit ...

This was good and I liked the imagery, but the fact that the grandpa is there makes it less scary because he seems strong. I wonder what will happen. It ...