writeswiththunder

I didn't read it, but just by looking at the amount of words between your repeated phrases tells me they are too repetitive. When you repeat something, try to build ...

Eh it was alright, kind of just waided through it. Felt borderline too descriptive. *all right. Sorry, just had to correct you! Alright isn't accepted like altogether is. *It felt ...

Eh it was alright, kind of just waided through it. Felt borderline too descriptive. *all right. Sorry, just had to correct you! Alright isn't accepted like altogether is. *It felt ...

Look at post below this one.

I really like this!!! The rhyming scheme was wonderful and I even liked how you used 'Christ, mas." I can't give you an amazing review because I am not the ...