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Re: One Man Russian Roulette
I didn't read it, but just by looking at the amount of words between your repeated phrases tells me they are too repetitive. When you repeat something, try to build ...
Jan 27, 2012 -
Re: One Man Russian Roulette
*based on a true occurrence in my life* Spin. Clack. 'Round the chamber goes. Evil hurries quickly, Feeding on your woes. Spin. Clack. Where'd that bullet go? It hurtled itself ...
Jan 26, 2012 -
Re: Seven Minutes to Regret
Eh it was alright, kind of just waided through it. Felt borderline too descriptive. *all right. Sorry, just had to correct you! Alright isn't accepted like altogether is. *It felt ...
Jan 17, 2012 -
Re: Seven Minutes to Regret
Eh it was alright, kind of just waided through it. Felt borderline too descriptive. *all right. Sorry, just had to correct you! Alright isn't accepted like altogether is. *It felt ...
Jan 17, 2012 -
Re: The Four People Nina Helped (And the One She Couldn't)- P1
This is pretty good. In your first paragraph your wording is awkward though. Remember to use proper punctuation in your dialogue. Here is a link that will explain everything. Your ...
Jan 17, 2012 -
Re: Seven Minutes to Regret
Look at post below this one.
Jan 17, 2012 -
Re: It's Chris, Miss
I really like this!!! The rhyming scheme was wonderful and I even liked how you used 'Christ, mas." I can't give you an amazing review because I am not the ...
Jan 16, 2012 -
Re: Seven Minutes to Regret
:?:
Jan 16, 2012