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I love the beginning, it's strong and flows very well! But I think the emotion of this poem could be expressed in more detail and length. If you added some ...

I love the beginning, it's strong and flows very well! But I think the emotion of this poem could be expressed in more detail and length. If you added some ...

Hate to be mean or rude, but this is MY POEM!!!!!!!! But I titled it "Just to Let You Know" I am VERY upset that you have STOLEN my work, ...

Wow.... I am dumbfounded I did not expect so much emotion, I will have to critique this tomorrow because you have so much here it is kind of confusing. Promises ...

...Okay. So, I fixed the "which wait, a short wait to rot" to "which wait, a short while to rot". Then I fixed the error "The world silently dies" to ...

One morning, an ordinary, usual morning. We'll all wake to silence and leave it that way. Nobody will speak silence and mute will fill every room. Salty tears will sting ...

You have a great start, I think with some adjustment to structure, flow, some more lines.....and, you will have an amazing astrological poem, let me know if you continue with ...

I lay on the leafy flesh that veils the jutted rocks, protruding from the rich earth. I lay beneath the swaying limbs like that of a skirt upon a dancer's ...

I would like to see it extended since its so good but, the feeling of being lonely gets through nicely and the imagery is simply explicit. Thank-you for writing this, ...

Well you need not my opinion as you have many but for what it is worth this is very simple clear yet powerful, something many can not do, so talent ...

I pity you hapless and without knowledge of love so profound. Which can not be explained by words, truly known by any person, alone. Or, limited to the word itself. ...

Umm... I may be wrong but does the narrator kill the people that hurt the one he/she loves...cause you say "No one can bring back the dead to here the ...

This is VERY good, and you have a bright future ahead of you if you continue like this!!! Everything is perfect, you are going to get absolutely sick of me ...

First, I hope this is not a feeling you've had even though I am sure it is since, the pain in this poem is hard to fake. This is a ...

Worth continuing? Defintley. You need to find your writing style, your writing like its facts. The death didn't seem emotional...MORE EMOTION!!!! Goodluck!!!!!