writeitalldown

I ABSOLUTELY LOVED your poem!!! I laughed and then read it to everyone and laughed some more, this poem made my day. :) As a poem I shall critique it ...

I do have some suggestions... but do not take me seriously, its just one writer to another. *Instead of using 'till' I'd use until, It just sounds better in my ...

Hallie, I absolutley love this poem, my you know is not rhyming, but you have done it so nicely. I really love this poem, and defintley can relate to this ...

I am so upset with this peice...... I want to hear it, now. Lol. This peice was amazing, I loved the flow. The rhyming pattern was close to perfection. "I ...

"Act like all is swell, It’s not burining like a cut"

Wow, I love your poem! My favorite stanza is the third, but I also like the rest of the poem. But a few nit-picks I found...but I they were ones ...

So, this is my second lyrical poem. My first one is MIA for now, I may have to re-write it. Listen to me, I'm here for you when you weren't ...

There is a bitter taste sitting in my mouth, sitting upon my tongue, coating my lips. Tears augment, fill me whole. I pretend to be strong, all the while I'm ...

First I must compliment you on your simple yet bold title, the reason I clicked on your poem. "How I thought I've learned my lesson"

I would just like to thank-you for writing this very emotional and well written poem. I have no useful advice that could be of advantage to you, except for "keep ...

Umm... AMAZING!!!! I cant really "critique" this so I am just going to tell you why this is soo amazing!! The emotion is bold, it grabs the reader, makes them ...

Kind of cliche, and the ending line. "I hope you really do, Too." kind of lost me it makes sense, just doesnt fit or flow as much. My biggest problem ...

Amazingly raw. What I would like to see is it more broken up into stanzas, to help the flow that you have. But overall, good-job.

What if I spoke of life as prosperous, enjoyable, perfect, human equality exists, no humor at your pain, no cries to muffle? Then, I persuade you. Somewhere, life Is perfect ...

"It's the first day of school. A new building,new hopes. I walk the hallways. Alone in a sea of children.I follow a crowd of familiar faces, and wind up in ...