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first one - 8.5/10, this made me laugh(: second one - 7/10 I'VE HAD THIS CONVERSATION!! haha(: not exactly but pretty similar, I was pretty creeped out. (funnier in person)

Hey tossy(: I can understand that you are trying to convey pained emotions that are enflicted by the mother figure in this poem, but it can be done with more ...

This poem was well written and...let's use "vivid" :p You used imagery VERY effectively, even though some images were well disturbing. I don't think I fully understood the poem, it ...

okay Emily, here as requested :) I agree with VuzzyCat... it needs to be longer. The stars are beaming and I am dreaming, the good and the bad the loves ...

Tired of long-sleeves in the summer; and feeling nothing, but alone. Hoping that each day will get shorter, as they fade away. Wave good-bye to the dreadful past, nothing but ...

Inside the cave,

I love this...but, its not a complete poem in my opinion. I want to get more from this, all I get is some haunting skeleton lady is coming to get ...

I'm simply blown away, sorry I'm no help but amazing job, I loved the short sentences it was very creative and made me stop breathing every time, I'm in awe... ...

I'm simply blown away, sorry I'm no help but amazing job, I loved the short sentences it was very creative and made me stop breathing every time, I'm in awe... ...

Doesn't your stomach unravel ribbons, which tie into bows that twist and curl climb your throat, fill your mouth and choke you as tainted words munipulate the air and lace ...

The lines "I'm happy we're close even this way instead Because if I'm honest, I love you, dear friend" should either be re-worded or elaborated more in the poem how ...

I enjoyed the idea and complexity of this poem. Dream type poems are often difficult to write because the "dream state" is so confusing itself and so detailed and emotional ...

(giggles as typing) Ummm... I liked it. I was going to comment and correct all your punctuation, but then the signature caught me. It made me laugh, and I enjoyed ...

Really, your style is educated and detailed, which I love. Your poem is perfect as is all your other works that I've read, so this is not to critique but ...

Ummm..Hallie? I know this isn't all you wrote, at least I hope not... Write more, but on what you have now the line "as ever you were when we" doesn't ...