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I have to agree largely with Brad here. I get that you want there to be havoc, but in doing so you outcast the reader and make the piece inaccessible. ...

I really liked parts of this. For example the last four lines to close are monumental. The biggest problem I have is it’s setting in the larger scheme of things ...

Thanks for the feedback. It’s very impressive – the analysis is spot on. Though I feel you have not gone far enough in one crucial area – which is more ...

P.s This poem has been pretty successful, but do you think the heroic couplet works here? thanks, Mark

Asylum Dedicated to salvan Monday 13th December 2004: My Dignified Friend The first thing I saw was his gleaming grin, Though did not know it hid a life so grim. ...

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Salvan ...Dedicated to a victim of the Tsunami Monday 13th December 2004: My Dignified Friend The first thing I saw was his gleaming grin, Though did not know it hid ...