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Cheers all, Fand, I think your advise is for the best! Worgs

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Do you really feel like that? - I think that re-drafted into a more 'proper' (crap word - sorry) fiction this could work and work well - that it relies ...

Brad, This is ambitious, which is a good thing, but for me unsuccessful. It falls down on the basics. First, where’s the hook? Even after three paragraphs you don’t give ...

An absolute classic: Dulce Et Decorum Est by Wilfred Owen Bent double, like old beggars under sacks, Knock-kneed, coughing like hags, we cursed through sludge, Till on the haunting flares ...

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Brad, Not "get it", but be inside it, there is an important difference. Other than that point taken. Cheers, Mark

Bob, as you know, there is always something to think about and mull over! Cheers for the discussion. Mark

Hey! This is REALLY REALLY good! I can't believe you're only 15 - you definitely have your own voice in your fiction, which sometimes takes so so long to establish. ...

Loved this - really hits home. It sounds ' gorgeous' if that maks sense? The second stanza especially - wow. Worgs.

Thanks, Brad, for the feedback. We've all shared this at some point? I certainly haven't and I doubt many our age have. It's an observation written about someone else in ...

Yeah man, point taken. Not sure it quite works for me here, but it's not far off - that's the beauty of subjectivity I guess! Cheers, Mark

Bob, man. I'm going to leave this one here because we fundamentally disagree. I feel your view represents the classist regime that dominates literary criticism in this country. Now you're ...

blah blah blah - comes witha full time job huh? Anything to get out of doing actual work. Plus I had to much beer last night and can't quite differentiate ...

I certainly appreciate that breaking the conventions doesn’t work necessarily. Like I said my attempt doesn’t work and was binned four years ago! Without conventions at all anything would pass ...