wonderland

Thank you for having that car accident. If you didn't put that in there, this chapter really would have been the start to a cliche teen novel. You have spelling ...

1) Romeo and Juliet-Taking Three hours just to say good-bye! Really? 2) Twilight. I'm sorry, It had to be said. it was gross. 3) The Hunger Games- Please, don't kill ...

Agreed with Nike said. There is nothing in this piece. You need more emotion, more description, more, well everything. It was one of those peices in which there could be ...

Oh, oh, ew, ew. Thats like a heart attack in a KFC wrapper

They keep mostly to themselves; don't make a sound in case they hear you. It only hurts me to be near you. Keep those tired eyes closed careful follow my ...

Well, then. This is a very flat piece. Put some emotion into it You;re dealing with some hardcore stuff. Match it with the emotion. I think thats it. Keep writing. ...

Oh, my gosh. I totally get how you feel...long story, but I do understand the emotion behind this. Anyway, this is literally perfect. I can't find anything wrong with it. ...

Alright, I'm not even sure where to start. I can see tons of pontential in your writing, but this was only so-so. I can see Fantasy cliches everywhere, and I ...

I'm a hopeless romantic, so that really played with my emotions. That was really good, but I didn't read the unedited version. Good work ~WickedWonder

Wait....? Her sister is missing, yet her friends are freaking out about the fact that her Ex-Boyfriend kissed her? Really? That doesn't seem so realistic. Other then that, I'm not ...

Shortly after dinner, while the girls were talking, Lawrence explained to his father that he wanted to marry Marie. His father, who had liked his girlfriend agreed, and told him ...

Yes. A One-shot. I'm not continuing this. This is just mostly based on my life right now. Enjoy ~WickedWonder “Cross your heart and hope to die?” It was what she’d ...

Your writing style is really choppy, which makes the flow really choppy. I noticed you write mostly in sentance fragments, which isn't the best. You can extend some some of ...

Marianas Trench-Anything by them Hedley-anything by them Any musical ever made (I act, sing and dace, thats why) Some, old, retro stuff (Madonna, Pussycat Dolls, Prozac) Glee! (I love glee!!) ...

I am so sorry all of this happened to you. I can totally get all the emotion and pain you probably went through. Message me if you ever want to ...