wonderland

That was, well, slightly disturbing! It was good, though, I liked it. It's weird, like you can really feel every single creepy emotion, which was cool. Keep writing ~WickedWonder

I'm going for five reviews, maybe ten, depending on my life schedule

Well, that was really depressing. But, I've noticed, you sometimes take the depressing route with your work. i really have nothing too critical, except, to break your work up into ...

This is another one-shot, written in between playing my new glee app and doing some homework. Thoughts? I clutched the glass of whiskey in my hand, not wanting to drop ...

I don't know. Most of the dialogue in this piece seems very unrealistic. Would a father call his obviously depressed daughter a 'bitch'? or tell her she's gonna end up ...

and so? There was all of that, and really, not much. barely anything on your MC, nothing on the setting. Speaking of your MC, she may be somewhat of a ...

That was really interesting. Nice character choice. It was very new, writing from the moon's perspective-mad props! It was also a little odd story-one of those little gems you get ...

THat was reshfreshing! Finally! Something where the vampires actually die. Thank you. Other then that, this was super interesting. I don't suppose your going to keep working on this, so ...

This isn't a short story. It's almost a perfect monologue. You have the emotion perfect, and very little description, which, I usually would freak about, but it works here. This ...

Prologue 2 years ago “Do you think we’ve lost them?” Sonny turned as they ran through the woods behind her house her sisters Jane and Marilyn looked back “I doubt ...

Firstly-Welcome to the YWS. Now I'm gonna tell you that you shouldn't write for us. Write for yourself, and maybe share some with us. This piece was only so-so. You ...

I really felt like this was only okay. Your description was okay, your beginning alright. You really are missing something, and not just emotion. Your whole piece seems devoid of ...

That was really beautiful, in a dark, gothic, way. I can really feel your emotions, your description was wonderful. You are a really good writer. Keep writing ~WickedWonder

That was really interesting. Will the stories all end up meeting each other, or will they stay separate? I really hope they meet up with some fantastic plot. YOu really ...

That is so sad! Seriously! One thing i really enjoyed about this piece though was the way you switched tenses through Dans memories. The one thing I'd suggest is italicizing ...